Funny it should be you to comment on it.
But I digress, if I had been given that I would be far more cordial. There's an actual reason behind it, one I can understand and even appreciate. The way I hear it, pre-readers catch a lot of flak from shitty writers whether they're polite with the rejection or not, and so they don't bother. However, that only encourages everyone
to complain due to the complete lack of transparency, yet this is thought to solve any of the problems inherent with bad writers who feel as if they have privileges.
A bit of history behind the story is that it was made as part of an art trade, a thousand words for a picture. Obviously, it went a little beyond that, as is a story's wont to do, and so I wrapped it up with as much comedic timing as I could manage and pushed it out the door, whereupon it hit second slot in the featured box and enjoyed great success for a silly little romp. At that point I figured, "Well, what do I have to lose?" and sent it off to EqD, not realizing that a little bit of my sanity was the price for postage.
Had I been told it needed some fleshing out, things would be fine. Instead, they nuked it from orbit by saying they wouldn't accept it again and gave "themes" as the one and only reason, as if that was somehow a satisfactory conclusion after being strung along for two months like a dragon behind a certain mare (the one presenting herself to Glorious Gilda in your picture).
The "themes" they were referring to were the belief that the story is fetishtic in nature, which would be a valid argument were it not for the fact that the story largely focuses on Shining and Cadence dealing with an unexpected bundle of joy who can vibrate the entire kingdom to dust, as opposed to "Baby Twily waddles around and goes boom boom in her didees". (This information comes from a different, more helpful pre-reader). If they're banning on fetishes now, then might I suggest starting with My Little Alicorn for similar regression (on top of the nightmare-inducing scenery randomly tossed in half-way through the story), followed by This Platinum Crown for having a grown stallion literally shit himself and then sit in that filth, along with a heaping side of bondage, torture and mental rape? One cannot enforce a rule while protecting similar lawbreakers and expect people to accept it, after all.
The implied piddling Twilight did is easily removed, after all. Surely making water off-screen is not nearly as egregious as some of the works EqD has posted in the past.
Most of the comment section in the story would disagree on the ending, but it seems to be one of those "popular-but-uninformed opinion" things where your average Joe loves something but the critics turn their noses up at it, if recent reviews are anything to go by.
And I understand the fridge horror it has, not being a fan of mental regression myself. As I said, it was a trade, and such were the conditions, so I did my best to ensure the reader wouldn't worry about Twilight's well-being in the care of a loving brother and quasi-sister. It does tread a fine line; all it would take is Cadence saying Twilight would make for a good daughter instead of expressing a desire for one of her own to tip this into bleak territory. Then again, I would lose the mental image of Twilight reading while mouthing the words (which, I felt, showed she wasn't helpless by any stretch, merely mentally encumbered).
Again, going through the comment section (all one-hundred and sixty-nine of them) doesn't show anyone expressing such fears, so by dint of that I would be inclined to say that any worries about the layman finding issue with it are unfounded.
I intend to re-submit after tweaking out the more "offensive" scenes and adding a little more substance to the proceedings, which I'm sure will make RogerDodger happy, although I already have another story lined up and waiting to be held in the Queue of Perpetual Stasis.
Much obliged. Funny how one can only get proper information through unofficial channels. I used to think EqD and the pre-reader's reputation was largely over-exaggerated, but some are doing their best to convince me otherwise so far.
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