The argument as it currently stands is based on subjective interpretation of actions. Let’s make this concrete: find an example in published fiction of ,” she giggled, or an equivalent thereof.
And in that variation, the otherverb is divorced from its subject and it’s still too easy to misapply modifiers. Still not my favorite structure.
Not an error in comprehension. The section in question, quoted in its entirety:
>This concept of not repeating a word too often holds true for characters as well. You do not always have to use a character's name when a short description or a pronoun will do.
>Rainbow Dash rocketed into the sky, her wings working hard to gain the speed she would need. Pinkie Pie applauded and cheered as Rainbow Dash trimmed her wings and tilted her head back, throwing herself into a spin. Pinkie Pie whooped even louder as Rainbow Dash began to spin, sending a spray of water droplets in all directions.
>In the above paragraph, the name "Rainbow Dash" appears three times and "Pinkie Pie" twice. This gets repetitive and tiring to read. Try replacing some or even all of these with a short description.
>The blue pegasus rocketed into the sky, her wings working hard to gain the speed she would need. Ponyville's premier party pony applauded and cheered as the rainbow maned flier trimmed her wings and tilted her head back, throwing herself into a spin. The pink pony whooped even louder as the multi-chromatic blaze began to spin, sending a spray of water droplets in all directions.
>In this paragraph, the proper names for our marshmallow cuties were not used once. It's still clear which pony is doing what. This is not always the case with pronouns. When you have two females present within a section, using words like 'she' needs to be done carefully and unambiguously. Assume that the reader WILL mix up who 'she' is if it is at all possible. For example:
>Rainbow Dash rocketed into the sky, her wings working hard to gain the speed she would need. As she hit her apex, she tilted her head back and trimmed her wings. Her maneuver threw her into a blaze of spinning colors, scattering water droplets everywhere, while Ponyville’s premier party pony cheered her from below.
Again, this section advises writers to
>Try replacing some or even all of these with a short description.
I, personally, see little wrong with the first paragraph, and my only problem with the third paragraph is its use of “Ponyville’s premier party pony.” The second paragraph is an atrocity, but the Omnibus unambiguously advocates it and its equivalents.
I believe that published fiction is likely the best source of guidance in these issues. Published fiction restricts itself in almost all cases to using names and pronouns. The only instances I can think of in which published fiction uses short descriptions in place of names or pronouns are when 1.) the characters’ names are unknown, and 2.) when the descriptions are actually being used to describe those characters, rather than as stand-ins for names/pronouns.
Again, I welcome concrete counterexamples. If you find examples in published fiction of short descriptions being used instead of names or pronouns, please post them here.
Anyway, I’m out of classes for today because of Lincoln’s birthday. Three-day weekend means this still counts as the weekend.
>Show vs. Tell
The example given here is correct, yes, but I feel that its length obfuscates the real essence of Show vs. Tell. An amateur author could well draw the conclusion that Show/Tell is simply a matter of length. Long sentences can still tell, short sentences can still show. For instance,
>She blushed. She was embarrassed.
The second sentence is longer, but it’s still telling. This segment isn’t wrong per se, but I think it could be misleading.
>an advanced writer who knows what they’re
singular/plural agreement. Only pointing it out because you went to the trouble of “his or her” a few sentences earlier.
>Crossovers must also deal with how well an average reader will understand it.
“It” has no clear antecedent (another singular/plural issue).
>unlikely to patronize your story
Patronize can mean “act condescendingly toward,” “provide aid or support to,” or “frequent as a client or customer.” None of these definitions quite fits.
>any story with gratuitous amounts of violence, gore, or otherwise mature themes need to be
any story [...] needs to be
>they are still available as a plot device and thus their power remains.
>they fall under the auspices of 'Special Snowflake' due to their uniqueness alone.
This phrase isn’t explained. Also, use double quotes.
[Note: I often see people use double quotes for dialogue, but single quotes for scare quotes, sarcasm quotes, words treated as words, etc. That’s wrong; use the same type of quotes for everything. Could this issue get its own shoutout, perhaps?]
>Gradients are rarely if ever used, and this author can only recall them appearing on Celestia’s extended mane.
Rarity’s mane has gradients for the shading.
>they are considered exemplars of them
they are considered exemplars of those traits
>are in… well, character.
are... well, in character
>1.) 2.) 3.), etc. [In the “How to Submit” section]
You’ve bolded 6.), 7.), and 8.), but not any of the rest. Be consistent.
>Section 7: 5 Words
Section 7: Five Words
>where-ever — just
wherever, and be consistent with whether or not you put spaces around your dashes
>5 Words You Would Use
Five Words You Would Use
>I suggest waiting at least a day or two
Given the backlog you’ve developed, you might want to change this.
>‘TVTropes Will Ruin Your Life’.
“TVTropes Will Ruin Your Life.”
>helps the writer (or just the curious) follow the threads of their
helps writers (or just the curious) follow the threads of their