The Promises We Keep (Mac/Ditzy). You will cry.

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/3621/The-Promises-We-Keep

winters howl on fimfic.net
one of the best strait RD shipping fics out there if not one of the best shipping fics out there overall
(i honestly cried at the end)

Already have a thread for this here:
>>76932
Please remember to use the search function to prevent making redundant threads, thank you.

Ah, this wiki. I've edited it a little. I wrote the pages for Fallout Equestria, Dangerous Business, The Purloined Pony and maybe one or two others I've forgotten.

I don't know that "reviewers on /fic/" is a relevant topic for the wiki, though. While we reviewers do some hard work and make important contributions to a lot of fics, our work is pretty behind the scenes and most of the wiki seems concerned with stuff that's "in front of the scenes" so to speak.

http://mlpfanart.wikia.com/wiki/Fan_fiction#List_of_fanfic_pages
I see it has a profound lack of End of Ponies.

>>79032

If you love the fic you could write the entry,

Hey, if we're talking about learning how to do dialogue...

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Hills_Like_White_Elephants

I just would like to throw some Hemingway in here. A bit tangential to MLP, yes, but that particular story has helped me get the feel of how to write dialogue.

>>79022
>"I've never seen one," the man drank his beer.
As good as the work is, the grammar's quite out of date. I think.

Some pony forgot to sage?
(Off to read)

It still does dialog way better. It's not a bad read. But not only do I doubt Brongaar cares, I can't see him hunting the story down either.
http://www.scribd.com/doc/94569/Hills-Like-White-Elephants if you really want it.

As for dialog there are spots that are intentionally open for interpretation. You have the option of reading into it, but all in all it's very well done for two person dialog with no external interjections.
Still, while it's great for learning dialog, which 'Brongaar' clearly needs, it doesn't really help as much for the large scenes of multiple character focus that would help make this story readable.

But to get style problems down like this, he really needs to read more, then apply that sort of style to the story he's trying to tell.

I usually take the "best" damn fics I can find and point out everything bad to the readers who find them amazing. I'm a killjoy for the fun of it, and it also does help the author somewhat, if he's not a lazy ass and decides to fix the errors.

>>78961

I know exactly what you mean. It really sucks when people receive criticism, ignore it, then write another story with the exact same flaws. Like, you're only trying to help them be a better author.

"Assumptions" and... a clopfic. I know I'm horrible, but in my defense, it was a really good story until it got to that point. (100k+ words in) It may not be a pulitzer prize winner, but it was a gripping HiE story filled with the issues of a self-loathing brony, living in a world that shouldn't (but eventually does) accept him. But, when it started to hit the unmentionable scenes... It all went downhill, and soon became just another self-insert author fantasy.

(If anypony hasn't noticed, I'm a sucker for shipping fics)

>>78994
THIS THIS THIS

I don't particularly like Past Sins either, although I also don't dislike it. The Sue-ish nature and the way in which the mane six is presented doesn't bother me (I should confess that I have an unusually high tolerance for Sue-ish stuff).

What bothers me is, exactly as you said, it seemed like two different fanfics jammed together. The part building up Nyx seemed nice (not great, but nice). After the middle part, it seemed to me like the author didn't really know what to do. Nyx deals with her various... issues... in a really pedestrian sort of way. And, oh goodness, the ending. It seemed like the author just ran out of ideas and gave up.

I'd give it something like a C+

Fanfics I like... This was one of the last ones that I read, and it was hilarious: http://www.fimfiction.net/story/1383/Lily%27s-Medication

>>78953
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>>78994
>>79006

This is why I suggested OP delete the thread--so it doesn't keep bumping as the inevitable derail comes along. OP doesn't appear to still be around, anyways.

>>78996
While we're tearing into popular fics... Cross And Arrow was pretty average too. It kept the mane six in-character, but the overall plot felt pretty pointless, and I don't think the genderswap was as imaginative as it could have been.

It has some funny moments, but it's pretty forgettable. And the Lavender Unicorn Syndrome is through the roof!

I've actually reviewed it for my tumblr (http://eznwords.tumblr.com) but the post doesn't go up for another three hours.

>>78994
As for Past Sins... Nyx's cuteness is preserved at the cost of an actually interesting final act. Emomare Moon is boring and lame to read about.

As for the actual topic, some of my favourites are:
- The End of Ponies (you will see the bright shinies)…

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If you were wondering *why* it's considered poor form to post your fic in every single thread without announcing that it's posted in every thread, I'd like you to read my post here: >>78891

>>78985
Dem no offense, but this is an apology. Not a begging for reviews. Let's not start the drama in here, just let Guesswork apologize, forgive, and move on please.

>>78990
I know it's an apology, and I had already accepted it. I just thought that, considering Guesswork's proclivity for going all over the place, he/she may have not noticed my response/reply in one of those places. I wasn't trying to stir up drama, just call attention to something that may have been overlooked -- something I sometimes feel the need to do.

Connner has said he's doing a sequel in his FiMFic blog post. I'm pretty sure he doesn't want any help though.

Well, I've tried contacting Conner on FiMFiction and he hasn't responded. To be honest, I feel really put off. He could have at least had the courtesy to respond to my message and "No, Thanks."

>>78965
I bet he gets a lot of messages on a daily basis. And I bet a lot of them look similar. Don't take it personally.

>>78891
It doesn't help he posted in quite a couple of dead threads....

>>78905
Yeah, that makes it even worse. When/if the reviewers of those threads eventually come back to work on their list of fics, the review/response trail will be even moreso hidden away. It essentially makes it so that unless the reviewer scoured every other review thread, he/she would be unaware of preexisting reviews -- barring notices from others who've done the detective work for them, as I did in the past for Sparky (>>57266).

lol
dispute

- No Summary or Title, Strike One.

- Normal/Sad/Comedy Tag conflict, I really don't think you can pull off all three at once, Strike Two

>Blood Stain gave Crimson Fury a little nuzzle on the neck
- Easy, obvious PMS joke found on first skim, Ejecting from Fic.

I like Colgate/Romana a great deal actually. But your post has very little information about your story. We want to know about your story before we open random gdoc links.

>>77713
We see eye-to-eye; I never trusted those first two sentences. I'll be looking into it.
...This muffin tastes like descriptions.

>>77716
Eeep. That totally wasn't on purpose.

I gave the story a second chance out of boredom.
I don't see what you where trying to do here. And you need that before anything else.

Dude, how can you find this funny? There's a thin line between dark comedy and horror, which side do you think this line falls on?: “Okay. Can I just take a moment and--No offense, dude--And just take a moment to say how ironic it is that a pegasus killed herself by hanging?”

Why is Claw Junction an interesting place? It doesn't seem like it. You describe it as a flat background, then jump over to Cloudsdale. Your characters have nicknames and quirks, but don't seem like real people.

{ Equestria- Gryphon Kingdom }
Mayhaps you could have brought that up... earlier.

Formatting wise you should indent dialog. Maybe add a blank line between your dialog paragraphs, because your character dialog runs together. Your use of parenthesis comes of amateurish, seeing as we already know the characters thoughts, seeing asides as asides just makes them less part of the story, and more you just telling the reader what people are doing.
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The ones taking place in Ponyville with ponies?

Simple, because the show is just as cliche when you look deeper at it.

>>78846
Aww thank you, that's too kind :)

Isn't there still a thread for this topic buried in /fic/?
Not that this isn't a good one and with how far the other one has sunk by now I wouldn't expect the OP to go find it, but the old one could be mined for good ideas.

Would you kindly explain how a story can be [Grimdark] AND [Normal]? Methinks you need fewer tags.

Other than that, nice thread.

Illustrations are an interesting touch.

You seem to have a good grasp on grammar and punctuation, which is refreshing.

First paragraph feels a little purple.

Word of Faust says no alcohol in Equestria, but champagne bottles and apple cider may say otherwise. So I guess that's okay.
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>>78812
I didn't mean to hit the normal button, sorry, it was an error. I am looking for a reviewer, because I know that EqD doesn't want stories that haven't been proofread, and none of my friends are bronies. So I just wanted people to tell me if I was butchering the dialogue or I had commas in all the wrong places or whatever.

>>78830
Acheron >>76515 is an editor. Post your fic in his thread for editing. Vanner at >>64911 also does grammar reviews on request.

Stories go in review threads because there are way more authors than reviewers. Single-story threads like yours are nice, but generally don't tend to get very much attention because reviewers work in their threads and very few people look for stuff to read on /fic/.

Little bump for visibility

Yeesh, this week was kinda a bust wasn't it?
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>>78752

I've been busy today or I would've posted a bit earlier. Far from my best work, but there's a reason I prefer to review than to write.

Dragon Tales: a very small selection of Spike's journal entries.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1RmbgOJm8jHY9iHiMmzzsMvhHZJNxTB21KLuzX8kgEiI/edit?hl=en_US

Feel free to add this to the compendium.

>No one posts in the thread at all

>Forget to make the new thread

...ANYWAY, new thread: >>80147

We need a new thread, yarr.

Also, after a fic has been submitted, is it too late to get any comments/reviews on it? I forgot to request feedback from the blogponies.

Hi there,

I created and sent off a fanfic less than a couple of months ago and I got a response without any advice or help simply telling me that my fanfic would never be on EQD.

I replied asking for help but haven't got a response since.

I kind of shrugged it off and gave up on my fanfic at the time but recently i've felt like rewriting some parts of my existing fanfic.

I was wondering if there would be any point in me picking up my fanfiction again and maybe posting it to EQD or should I just leave it?

>>76127

>Spike getting an education in pony anatomy while he's still Twilight's assistant?

That could actually be a pretty good plot. Not in the way you mean, but in that Twilight trying to explain The Birds and The Bees to Spike would be pretty funny.

>>78659
Eh, I don't think I agree. I'd take it to a reviewer right here first.

>>78656
I think this gets assumed because it tends to be true most of the time. I agree with you that not every story needs to get on EqD and that not every author should aspire to that.

It's an assumption, but it's one that's backed up by experience.

Also, I'd say that there's generally no harm in trying to get your fic on EqD. Authors want exposure, and stories there will get a good number of reads. 'Course, it ain't really the place for obscure crossovers or experimental stories.

>>78661
I don't think that's really true in all cases. Some cases sure, but not all cases.

A musician can write a song because he wants to be on Billboard. That song is going to be different than if he's writing to reach people / express himself or herself.

Just look at, say, R.E.M.'s "Shiny Happy People". It's an iconic tune that defined the group for a while and everyone listened to it / loved it. But it wasn't made as a good song on its own merits. The band members hate it.

If I decided "I'm writing X to get on EqD", then X is going to be really different than "I'm writing X to be the best story with this idea possible."