>>102901
Don't fret too much about it; I only learned that particular trick a month or two ago myself, and that was after roughly two years of lurking /fic/ and /meta/.

>>102886
On Firefox (Mac or PC), clicking in the File field always brings up the file chooser. Canceling out of that leaves the text pointer in the field, but it doesn't allow typing or pasting.

Maybe on a different browser?

>>102910
>Maybe on a different browser?
Not chrome.

>>102790
Ehehehehe

>>102790
>>102798

>>102775
Hi there JessiDee! Unfortunately, as your fic is more of a screenplay than an actual story, I must regret to say that I cannot help you with it. It's just too far from my realm of experience. I would be, sadly, unable to help you with it.

Best of luck regardless,
Golden Vision

We'll work on your story. ( Done posting for the night )

Hello good people!

I am looking for ideas for my story The Five Ponies You Meet in Heaven. The premise is the same as the book it's based on, where [?]Twilight and her friends die in a hotel fire and meet five ponies who have influenced their lives[?]. I prefer someone who has read the original work by Mitch Albom. I just need help with [?]finding five original stories instead of using the ones from the book. I want them to be more than the "slice-of-life" lessons that you would find in your run-of-the-mill episode.[?]

Here is what I have written so far:
https://docs.google.com/document/d/18U5li5xXIu_8boPjHEOwlHn2AUPZQ51KCD1qQ6-KPUo/edit
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1cep3dYqaKRAFBt7WLCYZWcxQtNDulfA1x0FfVtsghrU/edit
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1c0I-aYTX4_XLT0H43bKNAAcMmsJWijsY3hk342p11Z4/edit

My Ideas Document:
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1GLxguNqpn_0hiOoDjoMnITb41LrwKDmMdNy89h0TILs/edit
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...and I already botch the spoilers. I fail =(

Is anyone available to look at my story? It has been up for a week and a half now with still no response...

>>102911
Are you sure you submitted it correctly? the 'Unclaimed Requests' list does not have a story under the name Love&War

>>102913

This is just the forum name, the story is request is under "Golden Hoof". The original submission is right here.

>>101425

I got saddled with something nasty.

Description.
Integrating.

I have to describe an abstract concept yay!

This is the post where I'm actually going to start helping with what you write. That was one of the things I forgot to mention in the OP. I'll try to point out odd word choices, do some minor proofreading, and the like.

>>102846
I can't wait to see what you come up with for this.

>>102715
This is good, it paints a good picture in my mind. But I'm going to have to ask: what constitutes a 'horrific angle'? That isn't the kind of thing that I'd think would take the adjective 'horrific'. Also, eyes aren't usually deep; I think you might've meant dark, which would flow better with the succeeding adjective. Wrong 'its' as well.

>>102720
Pretty good, but I'm curious: is Gummy some sort of inter-dimensional space-time traveling alligator? In any case, you certainly put across the idea of 'baffle' very well. I'm a bit confused as to how many ponies there are present. I thought he was talking to Pinkie, but then you say he was talking to both her and arguing with another at the same time. It kinda came out of nowhere. Overall, though, it was good.

>>102912
Eeyup. Pinkie's an anomaly in reality that threatens to tear apart the seams of the world. Gummy is the solution who's supposed to leave no traces behind. =P

>>102870
That's no problem. I wouldn't have spent this long on it if I didn't think the underlying story looked good.

I have a prologue of a story I'm working on finished, and looking for proofreading. I know it's just the prologue, I know it's short. But the entire story is a WIP

Title:Magic Nightmare

Word count (currently):920

Tags (currently):Corruption, Trixie

Link:https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Xy7YSGY7KRq2meb50MmsQu1gt1xU5zjRZzhgXeeQ_cc/edit

>>102897
THE QUEUE IS NOW CLOSED
It's been a while since I last posted that, so you can be forgiven for missing it. Still, can't take your story yet.

>>102888
Nope. It's too big of a project. I don't even know where I'd start (er, author 1 presumably). I'd have to analyze how one author's angle interacted with the next one up- it's a damn mare's nest and I don't mean pegasus house.

How can you be makin' a fic like this and simultaneously be trying to make it cohesive and in-character like a regular fic? Just run with the 'stunt' nature of it in some way. Your authors have strikingly different styles in places. I'm not gonna take on executive-producer duties- silly pony I might be, but I ain't crazy!

Greetings, cast. This one is just for Dash and Pinkie, unless Spitfire or Soarin are hanging around somewhere. I'd like to get a stamp of approval on the characterizations, if it's worthy of such.

This is a re-write of chapter 1 of my 6-chapters-so-far story, Rainbow Typhoon. I'm working on re-doing chapter 2 right now. The other chapters are likely to remain mostly as is during this rewrite period. But this request is just for chapter 1.

Title: Rainbow Typhoon
Tags: [adventure]
Synopsis: Sometimes reckless, often daring, always loyal, Rainbow Dash's one goal in life is to become a Wonderbolt. With a little help from a storm, her fondest wish is about to come true. But not all weather in Equestria can be controlled, and the plans of a brave little pegasus mean nothing to a hurricane.
GDoc: http://tinyurl.com/rainbowtyphoon1
Length: ~3200 words

Hopefully there will few grammatical errors. I've got a very good proofreader. :) (Happy birthday, Spabble!)
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>>102893
Hm. Rainbow is napping, and Pinkie's offended, so I'll take up the critical lance and joust away for you- how's that?

This fic worries me. It's loaded with italics and hijinks but it's hard to tell what matters in it. I wondered if maybe Rainbow was getting set up with Pinkie, but I didn't get much of a sense of it- and then Rainbow missed seeing the Wonderbolts, only to be surprised by them turning up at her house. It's all slapstick, but we're supposed to take their offer seriously?

You've got to be more careful of your tone, and think about what you're trying to accomplish. I can't tell whether it's supposed to be very light and giddy, or a romance, or some sort of drama centered around Dash playing Wonderbolt for a day. And the ending would raise more questions- if she got offered a spot with them, what about Pinkie back home? Is Soarin' into her? If she doesn't win a position with them in true Mary Sue Dash-gets-all-the-breaks fashion, what was all that slapstick stuff for?

Rainbow's tough to write for because you need her vulnerability to make her sympathetic, but her vulnerability isn't just about crashing into things, it's her fear of not measuring up. She wouldn't admit it to you, but she's awfully driven and insecure, and doesn't shake things off that easily. What she does, is bluster, and she's really good at that.

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The epithet (that's what this technique is called) should harmonize with the image being created. LUS bothers me when it shows up in the middle of a non-visual image. If your story is, at the moment, about the two ponies interacting, then role epithets are probably better.

>"Well, darling, tell me what you think," said Rarity and took a sip of tea. Her cup hung in midair.
> The schoolcolt looked down at the table. "I don't know anything about fashion. That's why I'm interviewing you, after all."
> Rarity laughed. "And that's why I'm asking. Only the tiniest fraction of the ponies who see my designs have the slightest clue what they're looking at. It's a fact of life in this line of creative work, and one I've made my peace with. An uninformed opinion is the purest."


New authors are usually a little too shy with character names, in my opinion.

I like this guide.
http://trickster.org/arduinna/epithet.html

I saw this and thought of you guys, pre-readers.

>>102902
Same.

>>102839
As promised, here is the new-and-improved Rainbow Typhoon chapter 1.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1zZZlVSrIudc5kDlgKduaxmC0WLTUDvsuGB7Jt8UqOOY/edit

I look forward to your feedback, Minty. :)

Not a story.

Hrmm, oh, I should keep going? This isn't just a meta experiment for an ARG where I get to experience the doldrums of being Cheerilee? Because that's your target audience. People who want to do the boring part of Cheerilee's job.

The first complaint I have, the one that's so obvious it burns, is that this 'story' lacks a narrative voice. You say the person transcribing this is Sweetie Belle, but you never really do anything with her as a character. This feels like a report you the author are writing, not a report written in character for Sweetie.

Then there's the parts that kill the idea that this story has any reality to it. First, the name of your record company is the most unpony thing you could think of. "Anderson-Ingram"
Seriously. You couldn't figure out what a company would be named if it were to be backed by ponies with interest in musical technologies? What pony would be named Anderson?
You could argue that it could be a griffon or something, but at that point, who would trust them?

You use the Julian calendar. Few things kill a good pony story by using a direct rip of the Julian calendar. Parallel Earth or not, giving one to one comparisons to Earth's calendar kills the seperation that I'm reading a story about magical ponies.
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>>102839
>>102861
This story (Rainbow Typhoon, ch1) is now also on Applejinx's House of IC Love for character review.
Link: http://www.ponychan.net/chan/fic/res/88548.html#102893

>>102741

>however I think what were were worried about is you being embarrassed about what book it was from.

No, I think what we were worried about is the fact that Fo:E is hardly a proper novel, is hardly even of the quality of a proper novel, and that you would come off as being childish. It would be as if you wrote your poem based on The Lusty Argonian Maid.

>>102837
Dude, no hating on The Lusty Argonian Maid, please.

>>102837
l should write a poem on The Lusty Argonian Maid, then..

I'll be honest with you: I'm probably not a great choice for a judge. I don't have a lot of free time, so if judging this contest is going to be particularly labor-intensive and/or time-sensitive, I may be more of a liability than an asset. However, I thought I'd put together an entry on the grounds that 1) if the time commitment isn't overwhelming, I think it'd be a fun to do, 2) I have acquired some minimal level of recognition within the ponyfic community as a harsh but fair critic and a teacher/reviewer of above-average skill, and 3) because I'm curious to see what, if anything, you'll have to say about this entry.

>>102625
While the main reason behind me wanting this position is that I’m a power hungry egomaniac, I would also love to help other writers achieve their best.

As an amateur writer myself I have a great deal of empathy for those attempting to create fiction but as a lover of the written word I would also be firm and ensure that only the best got through.

I am a few months into my degree in Literature (a dazzling qualification, I know) and have a solid grasp of both the mechanics of writing such as grammar and punctuation and of the more abstract concepts like story-flow and characterization.

Thanks so much guys! The contest is still open. I just want everyone to know that winners will be selected at 8:00 PM EST on May 20. Winners need to give me their emails (just give me your spam inbox if you're suspicious).

Agreed. We were only halfway through Part One.

I want people to see our work, dammit. "Welcome to Iron Riff! Today's special ingredient: pure smelly cheese! BEGIN!"

>>102821
Finally found this place.
Yeah, I would love to help with the fic anytime.

>>102821
I'm out of school now, so I can help pretty much any time. (The only reason I haven't added much to the riffs is because, unfortunately, I'm a bit of a lazy bastard. Eh he... sorry.)

>>102850
What's the mods' stance on spoilers for a story like this? I mean, he's giving away the ending here.

>>102887
I'd have been fucking furious if I'd been halfway through the story and seen this post.

Reported, not out of spite OP, but courtesy to those who have not finished the story.

If this thread gets deleted, which it should, and you then re-post in the FOE general, with proper spoilers used, I'd be happy to answer your question!

In response to this post: >>102887
It obviously should've been spoilered. As such, I've edited the text and I'll lock this thread as an example.

I've also send the OP a message so hopefully he'll use spoiler and post in a relevant thread next time.

>>102836
Oh, my. Is that pronounced "queasy"?

>>102836
"Uh Oh. Here we go again!"

Absolutely brilliant.

>>102739
>>102749

Tell ya what: since I do not know where this box is, I can tell you two things in this box that I do remember (kinda).

FIRST: A (really) short story I wrote in the...third grade? Was about how Zeus invented lightening. Like "The BAD-TEMPERED Dragon," it was illustrated, but less well. Essentially, Zeus got mad for no reason and lightening struck something.

Epic.

SECOND: Be very glad I cannot regurgitate this one. The assignment was to write a descriptive piece, so I did. I did not manage to finish the story, but what happened in it was this:
Orphan boy was alone in winter woods, clutching a thin summer blanket around his shoulders in a vain attempt to keep warm. Suddenly he sees a ray of sunlight breaking through the clouds, and he goes towards it. As he approaches, he notices that there is no snow where the light touches, grass is growing green, and there are animals and a hut in the middle.
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